Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illnesses and diseases and not enough on health and education and prevention
Some people perceive that some of the countries allocate too much amount on treating illnesses and diseases rather than using the budget for preventing the illness by increasing health education. I am aligned with this statement. This essay will cover the opinion of the two perspectives and will be followed by my opinion too.
To begin with, governments are more likely to give direct solution to their citizens. For instance, in my country Indonesia, they provide a set of health insurance called BPJS program for workers and it is open widely for all citizen to register. This program requires us to pay monthly in cheap and affordable amount. Therefore, if we are sick, we are eligible to take medicine in a particular hospital chosen by government for us. Besides, spending more money on treating sick people may become a shortcut to decrease the amount of diseases since we cannot neglect the inherent presence of it. For example, people tend to have either fever or cough during the extreme change of season.
On the other hand, being more focus on health education will increase knowledge and awareness to avoid illness. In fact, people perceive to stay healthy and prevent the occurrence of disease. A famous sentence from my country stated to “prepare the umbrella before the rain.” This sentence is implied to each person to eat more healthy foods, do more sports, and maintain healthy lifestyle all the time.
In my opinion, preventing illness to occur is as important as curing sick people. Healthy people need to keep healthy lifestyle, while disease should also be cured as soon as possible. Besides, safety and health awareness should be grown in each person.
To sum up, we have to avoid illness before we are sick as well as taking medicine quickly whenever illness attacks us.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
Some people perceive that some of the countries allocate too much amount on t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in fact, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00331125828 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53338958794 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592715231788 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2595476465 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4375 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.875 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201814084676 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579132170472 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664478817205 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103603400962 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547087419774 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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