To improve their appearances, many people spend a lot of money on products like clothing, haircut, and beauty products. Some people think it is a good way to spend money; other people believe that there are better ways to spend money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, most of people are talking about fashion which always spend a lot of money to support. Is it worth for us to pay a lot of money to improve our appearance? Let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision.
By social media, many people have smartphone on hand and they easy to obtain photo, picture and many information about fashion. For people especially teenagers are very interested in those beauty products such as clothing, haircut and beauty stuff. They have huge desire and enthusiasm to keep their good-looking to build up confidence.
In my opinion, this is the wrong message spread from mass media and social media. It gave the enormous impression for people that they must pay a lot of money in clothing, fashion accessories and beauty products. We should get rid of the wrong message by carefully using smart phone or computer.
Other than spend a lot of money on fashion stuff or beauty products to improve appearance. There are so many idea and better ways we should support and worth to spend. Reading, outside activities, charity work and travel are all huge advantages for your mental and inspire.
In conclusion, it is no contradiction of people spend money on fashion stuff to improve appearance. The vital is balance of your life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
Nowadays, most of people are talking about fashion which always ...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
... they easy to obtain photo, picture and many information about fashion. For people e...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
... they easy to obtain photo, picture and many information about fashion. For people especially te...
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Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun idea seems to be countable; consider using: 'many ideas'.
Suggestion: many ideas
...cts to improve appearance. There are so many idea and better ways we should support and w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, thus, in conclusion, such as, talking about, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1071.0 1615.20841683 66% => OK
No of words: 217.0 315.596192385 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93548387097 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62501358872 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585253456221 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 332.1 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3671006605 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.5 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408611060481 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128354678474 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113158141086 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216474288593 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571450341354 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.