Nowadays, obesity in young generation become a significant problems in several countries. This phenomenon might influence those young children's health when they grown up. This essay will discuss on this issues and some measures will be given.
Fast foods and unhealthy drinks become popular diets for young children and there is several advertisement from the fast food companies that children can watch from the TV. Those foods and drinks had been known are contained much sugar and fat but many parents are willing to buy this sort of meals for their children because it is convenient. Sometime, this sort of diet becomes a prize if children had practiced a good behavior or score. In addition, nowadays, most of children are addicted to games or Internet. They prefer to play the games or watch the video on Internet rather then going out for exercise. Therefore, the obesity problems happened to those young generations because of the unhealthy diet and have no regular exercise.
However, there are several solutions that parent and school can help to improve this situations. In the school, teacher can educate those young children by introducing how to eating a healthy diet for our body. They should teach them what sort of foods that can benefit to our body and prevent getting the weight. In order to bring their children out of the house, parents should spend time with their children and practice regular exercise. Parents should also take care of the meals which they provide for their children and avoiding the fast foods and sugary drinks. So, those prevention and education might be able to help to reduce the obesity problem on children.
In conclusion, although children tend to eat more fast food and addicted on games which cause overweight problems are growing, parents and school teachers can help to solve this problems by controlling their diets and bring them out for activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'grew'?
Suggestion: grew
... those young childrens health when they grown up. This essay will discuss on this iss...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advertisement seems to be countable; consider using: 'several advertisements'.
Suggestion: several advertisements
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Line 3, column 464, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...havior or score. In addition, nowadays, most of children are addicted to games or Internet. They...
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Line 3, column 584, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Line 5, column 575, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this prevention' or 'those preventions'?
Suggestion: this prevention; those preventions
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06329113924 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44165206311 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512658227848 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2519420478 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231230410665 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813678694169 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503970669261 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15751045431 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224286303039 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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