In modern world and dominant pressure of mass media, it is unavoidable that celebrities earn much more money rather than other professions such as doctors and teachers. In this essay the reasons and sights about the higher income of famous people will be analyzed.
For some people this attitude seem wrong that people who just entertain get more salary rather than some professions like doctors that play a vital role in human being’s life. While, entertaining is important they believe that these professions are the necessity of the developed society. For example, without teachers nobody could be educated and no one else would start a business.
Nevertheless, if we look to the highest income, we discover that generally sports and entertainments personalities earn the highest salaries. Probably, that is due to these reasons: Firstly, by the advent of mass Media people pay attention to celebrities more than others and this remarkable attention brings the chance of success for other businesses. They are more likely to influence on other aspect of society. For instance, celebrities can advertise cultural campaigns owing to they will be followed by public vastly. Secondly, sports and entertainments personalities that earn high income are extremely unique in a way doctors and other professions are not and they do something that no one can. Finally, most of the celebrities retire at their early 30s. Therefore, their career has short time while other professions often can continue their career until age of 65.
In conclusion, I personally subscribe to the idea that high income for the sport mans and entertainment personalities is justifiable and convincing. In modern world being media exposure is counted valuable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... vital role in human being's life. While, entertaining is important they believe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91748788124 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585454545455 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2523080097 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.285714286 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199555579101 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633998027372 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602941763803 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121263196191 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496214761712 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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