Many people expect that the proportion of old people will be more than the young people in the future. Do you think it is positive or negative development?
In many developed countries, the high percent of old people is becoming a big problem for the economic development. Although Vietnam still have a gold labour force, but I believe that in the near future, when the proportion of old generation will be bigger than the young one, there will be negative effection on the our country. On the following paragraphs, I shall put forth my arguments to support my point of view.
Firstly, the income of working people is not enough to cover all of an expense of the big family. Nowadays, in many families, only few persons have to be the breadwinners of their relatives, they need to find enough capital to have a fully life. Especially in the metropolis like Ho Chi Minh City, the husbands and the wifes need to work for many jobs in order to give their children and their parents an ability to access to top-norch infrastructures such as high-quality hospitals, high-ranked schools, etc.
Secondly, after long working-lifes, the retired people do not have enough pension to cover their life. With their limited budget, they cannot pay everything by their own, and have to call for help from their children. As a solution, today, many old people choose to go to the countryside, where is tranquil area and has a slow life. And the most important point is, at that place, the retired people have many chances to buy good with price which is cheap as chips.
In conclusion, I worry a lot about the increase of the percent of the old people in our life. The reasons are because the young people do not have enough resouces to cover for their older ones, and the pensions of their parents are not enough to take care by themselves as well.
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Suggestion: the; our
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Message: You used an adverb ('fully') instead an adjective, or a noun ('life') instead of another adjective.
...hey need to find enough capital to have a fully life. Especially in the metropolis like Ho C...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ity hospitals, high-ranked schools, etc. Secondly, after long working-lifes, the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70707070707 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60194648242 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1719912086 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273757641641 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106453223462 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744176208593 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178442676687 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781065892502 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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