Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Regarding the budget expenditure on public places, people around the globe provide their opinions to the government. Although some are in favour of new museums and town halls, I, however, believe that as long as the renovation of the existing buildings are possible, government should not waste money on the new one.

Firstly, redeveloping and preserving the ancient places often costs lesser than constructing the new one. For example, the Brazillian government had renovated many museums of their country because new public buildings usually require steep financial resources. However, renovation generally costs only 3% of the construction of new place. Moreover, by saving money from the new development, government can spend that money to facilitate their locals in many ways such as they can install air conditioning systems in the old buildings.

Another reason for renovation of existing buildings is that it has historical values. Every country has its unique history which some can find from their heritage museums and monuments. Therefore, despite having sufficient budget to construct new buildings, government prefer to preserve the historical places. Furthermore, older places usually have an emotional attachment with their local people as many of the countries have long bloodshed history and museums reminds them the sacrifices their ancestors did for freedom.

In conclusion, not only cost is a motivating factor for the preservance of existing bulidings, people usually have strong emotions attached with the historical monuments. Therefore, I believe that government should spend their money in the maintenance of the existing buildings.

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Suggestion: many ways
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67871485944 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8752608097 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562248995984 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0138096094 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.833333333 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204336587906 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872693157487 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684648645229 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143464509108 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566927082895 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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