Music should not be taught in schools instead other subjects such as computer and science should be taught. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.
In today’s technologically advanced world, where enormous importance is given to acquiring knowledge in the field of computers and science. As a result, certain section of the society believes that other arts such as music is obsolete and is of no value and should be removed. Whereas, others have contrasting views supporting inclusion of music. In my opinion, it is absolutely incorrect idea to exclude such a noble profession as ingraining children with various talents helps in boosting their careers.
Firstly, music is considered as one of the purest forms of fine arts and have numerous benefits such as, it improves child’s creativity, boost confidence, and reduces stress related to academics. Secondly, teaching music at school might result in exploring newer talent, ultimately encouraging a child to select it as his career profession. For example, one of the greatest contemporary Indian musician by the name AR. Rahman, who is also an Oscar award winner has explored his talent in music during his schooling. Thirdly, to have an optimum child’s mental growth, it is recommended by psychologists to teach them as many arts as possible. Furthermore, a recent study done at NHS – Europe, has proved that, learning music helps in fighting stress, depression and isolation. Therefore, including it in student’s curriculum is a must.
On the other hand, it is undeniable fact that science and technology plays a prominent role in child’s education and have become basic necessity for students. However, inclusion of these subjects does not mean exclusion of other arts. Moreover, children should have all the various options to select his field of interest.
To conclude, in order to foster a child in a best possible way, it is important to have various talents ranging from music, sports, computers and academics. Therefore, forcefully excluding a specific field, that too such a noble and pristine one is irrational and not viable. Instead, it is school’s responsibility to encourage children to strive hard to learn music.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, whereas, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37423312883 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06885245579 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610429447853 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1082958755 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.058823529 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7647058824 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168968284166 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511514368978 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492166134735 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109081985274 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476723779562 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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