It is not uncommon to see these days parents who have great expectations from their children in school and in sport as well. Some are worried that this attitude, despite good intentions, can indeed damage the children. On the other hand others claim that pressure is essential to prepare children for the foreseeable future. In this essay I will briefly compare those two opposite points of view and explain why I think that children should be free to develop themsleves without pressure.
Childhood is a sensitive age, where kids begin to discover the world around them, they make acquaintance with the surroundings and explore their interests. Sometimes parents interfere too much in this crucial phase putting excessive pressure on their offspring. They want them to be the smartest at school or the strongest at sport. They want them to be the best musician or the best actor. It occurs often to children that they attend a class or sign up for a sport only to accomplish their parents. Research suggests that this behaviour can be linked to the desire to see the children succeed where the parents failed. It is a huge mistake that can ensue burdensome damage to the children, who are forced by parents to do something they maybe do not like. I think therefore, that parents should encourage children to nurture their interest, whatever they are. For example, a child who discovers a passion for music should be allowed to play a musical instrument to fully develop his talent and maybe to become a famous singer.
On the other hand, there are many who claim that it is in the interest of the chidren to put pressure on them. They support this theory in the wake of the fact that the world does not anybody halfway and that they will have to be strong in order to success over the competitors. Pressure it is thus seen as a tool to forge the character of the children and to prepare them for the challenges of the future. There are some seeds of truth in this approach. It is true that competition can be very tough at school, at work and in sport and that only the best come over obstacles. Gaining the ability to face up to major problems it is also vital and one of the key ingredient to reach success.
Summing up, although I think that is right to prepare children for the challenges of the future I do not believe that is necessary to nip their dreams in the bud, constraining children to follow the failed dreams of their parents. Childhood is a unique season of life which should be spent playing, learning and discovering the world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put before the verb 'occurs'.
Suggestion: often occurs
...the best musician or the best actor. It occurs often to children that they attend a class or...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 7.30460921844 287% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 452.0 315.596192385 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65486725664 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49936165396 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493362831858 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0277114894 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.19047619 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5238095238 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300792500338 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888610367918 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076234181812 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180880190051 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633159649679 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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