At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large member of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
In the globalization era, increasing a number of population as a driver problem for some country. One of the problem is unbalance of the number of young adults and the older people in some country. Further, this has speculate among people about the advantages and disadvantages. I believe this condition has bring huge advantages for the country, whereas the disadvantage also can not be denied.
On the one hand, the country which has enormous number of young adults can be more useful according to political and economical aspect. Take Justin Trudeau, for instance, the prime minister of Canada. As a leader, he has tendency to become more passionate and does not hesitate to take a risk. This definitely becomes an advantage. Besides, young adults can be use as a man resources to develop a country and also sometimes they has an idea and opinion out of the box, they more creative to solve and invented new tools for young generation.
On the other hand, become a young adult also can not be denied as a reckless and unresponsible to their job. They often has a wrong decision due to limited of experience and knowledge. Take my colleague's experience, for instance, He was my senior at the University. He became enterpreneurship right after graduate. He immediately established his company. In the first year, everything went well. Whereas, the next year due to limited consideration about the effect, he was bankrupt.
In conclusion, I believe that having young adult is a alternative way to develop the country due to their skill and behaviour. Whereas, is also there are disadvantages from this condition for some country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 217, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'speculated'.
Suggestion: speculated
...ople in some country. Further, this has speculate among people about the advantages and d...
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Line 1, column 309, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
...dvantages. I believe this condition has bring huge advantages for the country, wherea...
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Line 3, column 430, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...velop a country and also sometimes they has an idea and opinion out of the box, the...
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Line 7, column 53, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n, I believe that having young adult is a alternative way to develop the country ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, so, well, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1370.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01831501832 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96410564226 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527472527473 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5135627344 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.1111111111 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1666666667 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156311489306 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488180380261 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048611731378 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105979081974 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618731245907 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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