Many experts claim that, the large number of smoking people are exposing to smoke and because of smoking the high amount of serious disease esculate day by day. Some people say that, smoking should make illegal by manfacturers .
On the one hand , smoking is dertimental to people's health. it brings to several serious illnesses . Firstly, smoking is exposed to people by itself . Then smoking effect to smoker's lung and their way of breath . Due to consume of large amount sigarette observe shortness of breath and some lung's disease in many people . Furthemore sigarette's toxic stream has bad effecting for enviroment . For instance , nowadays people are smoking a lot of sigarette . That reason the goverment should stop working to smoking producing .
On the other hand , if the goverment will closed smoking product . This is may dertimental for the goverment economics . Because the goverment take huge quantity of tax from sigarette factories . That reason the countries do not stop to sigarette producing . Neverthelles , some people prefer to consume more stronger cocaine than sigarette . Subsequently , people use with way of illegal for consume stronger cocaine . As a result , the number of offence grow up at present .
In coclusion , I do not approve to produce smoking product . Because smoking is very harmful . owning to smoking the number of deaths rise and it has bad affect to their new generation. However, it may drop the economic of goverment .Moreover, goverment should improve rules about smoking.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, for instance, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1263.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 240.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2625 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7330510126 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 176.041082164 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.2975951904 54% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.6344192775 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.1428571429 106.682146367 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.4285714286 20.7667163134 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 35.0 5.01903807615 697% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195953862145 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660924754007 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632764230152 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135923894871 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653582477108 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 50.2224549098 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.04 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.1190380762 63% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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