In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?!
Nowadays, There are an mount of people prefer to search for a job after they have done their studies in high school, as a result, they need to help their family in paying the fees of their selected course in the future in such university due to the high cost of study in the universities as their familly can’t afford the whole amount themselves, as well as there are a large number of people prefered to travel to enjoy themselves for a foreign countries instead of going to register at the university direclty. So there are pros and cons for those students, which it will be argued as following:
On the one hand, Universities are absolute expensive to study for a specific subject currently, therefore the students will decide to work to save some money to cover one’s fees from the side of books, and paying other costs for such a university, for example if students confirmed to study medicine field, it will cost he / she a lot, because it is so costly, hence they they start to collect money for a one year duration so that they can survive to follow their ambitions by going throug what they like to be in the future, as well as student who want to study Engineers are expensive too. Furthermore, the family of students don’t have the ability to pay for them all the fees, due to their other basic demands in life.
In addition, leaving the country or working for at least one year will lead for late graduation compared to one’s colleagues, consequently, they might be affected on them psychology after they find that their mates have graduated earlier than them, and they will join the careers early which it will help them to seize the opportunites in the market, moreover they have one year experience in advance attached to their background in which realted to their domains.
To sum up, having had one year vacation before studying at the university is useful, but you have to comprehend that there will be passive effects, it will come over you. So think into depths before taking this decision for the purpose of avoiding blaming anyone in the coming days.
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Comments
Hello test big team,
Hello test big team,
I need just to enqiure about why i always have automated readiblity is low?!
What does not it mean?!
As i guess, that no one can understand while they are reading it!
Thanks
Hussein
First, you didn't use
First, you didn't use punctuation marks properly. for example, in this paragraph:
In addition, leaving the country or working for at least one year will lead for late graduation compared to one’s colleagues, consequently, they might be affected on them psychology after they find that their mates have graduated earlier than them, and they will join the careers early which it will help them to seize the opportunites in the market, moreover they have one year experience in advance attached to their background in which realted to their domains.
all of punctuation marks are commas, then the e-grader will consider one paragraph as one sentence. So the automated_readability_index is extremely high:
automated_readability_index: 31.5 13.0946893788 241% => Automated_readability_index is high.
and cause other indexes wrong too.
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There are other issues which are serious too:
1. a lot of sentences start with pronouns, like: 'they'. The examiners will not like it.
2. there are some grammar errors as well
3. the introduction is wordy
4. and more...
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 21, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
Nowadays, There are an mount of people prefer to search for a ...
^^
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'mounts'?
Suggestion: mounts
Nowadays, There are an mount of people prefer to search for a job af...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 374, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...amount themselves, as well as there are a large number of people prefered to travel to enjoy them...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 452, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'country'?
Suggestion: country
...ravel to enjoy themselves for a foreign countries instead of going to register at the uni...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 296, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r example if students confirmed to study medicine field, it will cost he / she a...
^^
Line 4, column 306, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...if students confirmed to study medicine field, it will cost he / she a lot, beca...
^^
Line 4, column 375, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: they
...e a lot, because it is so costly, hence they they start to collect money for a one year d...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 444, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce attached to their background in which realted to their domains. To sum up, ha...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, at least, for example, in addition, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73097826087 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5333898061 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538043478261 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 20.2975951904 301% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 221.567459003 49.4020404114 448% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 290.166666667 106.682146367 272% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.3333333333 20.7667163134 295% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.0 7.06120827912 340% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153804837064 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716303940936 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396200688056 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923109256878 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03062149782 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.5 13.0946893788 241% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 18.02 50.2224549098 36% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.9 11.3001002004 229% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 9.78957915832 276% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.4 10.1190380762 261% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 10.7795591182 250% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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