In the normal educational background, students should continue their degree to the next level at bachelor after their graduation in senior high school. Furthermore, the recent perspective said that students should take a rest for a while to go to travel or work before they want to continue at a bachelor's degree. This essay will explain the benefits and drawbacks according to this opinion.
the majority of people agree that we do not just take our skills in not only academic background but also other social life. for formal education, students learn about the hard skill, they know about mathematics, physics, geology, and etc. but they never know about the knowledge about their skills in practical life. Therefore, before they take a focus in college which is more focused on one particular skill, they should learn many things from traveling or working. This experience will expand their critical thinking and develop opportunities for their future professional skill. Furthermore, learning from traveling or working will develop their social circle which is they never take formal education. For instance, the student who gets an internship in the company will take more knowledge about their future career path because they learn about some problems that will be faced when they have work in compony. They also are ready with other soft skills as an employer such as communication, discipline, responsibility.
On the other hand, there are some drawbacks when the students choose to travel or work before a bachelor's degree. Firstly, some students should review again about their hard skills because the lost about 1 year not to study this skill. In addition, they also prepare this skill because they have to take the exam for university selection. Secondly, students who know about getting a salary to choose to be an employer rather than continue their studies. This situation happens when the student feels about comfort zone and they can sustain with this income and consider not to continue their education.
In conclusion, the benefits outweigh the negative impacts for the student who wants to travel and working before a bachelor's degree. While it lost 1 year's time, they take more opportunities to develop other skills outside formal education.
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...ow about mathematics, physics, geology, and etc. but they never know about the knowledge...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2131147541 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5767446531 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478142076503 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 578.7 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.3168453357 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142549087703 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565513811399 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352991357537 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106534349363 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0129411679012 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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