Some people become famous when they are young age. Do you think is it positive or negative?

Nowadays, number of famous people that there are in young ages are dramatically. This event has many side effects on each society. Some people believe that it’s a signal of right development way in all social. On other hand many people believe that it’s a sign of problem and it is out of order of natural life.
It is obvious that most of the people in the world like to rich to the high level of reverence in their society or maybe all the world. It is inevitable that youths are more interested in becoming famous than adults. Some people believe that youths have powerful potential abilities naturally and when we prepare infrastructures to help them to realize and use them they become famous easily and it’s a sign than our society is in right way. For example all of us know Mark Zuckerberg the founder of Facebook was a young when he creates Facebook and now Facebook is a one of the best computer applications in the world and Mark is a famous man. I am in this group of people and believe than we should help young people to reveal their abilities and become famous.
On the other side, many people believe that young men and women don’t have enough experiences to handle big problem and they can’t deal with problem that famous people involve in. This inability may lead to huge problem especially social problem, not only for himself/herself also for their people around them. For example Justin Bieber one of the youngest signer in the world bring a lots of problems like accident and so on because he does unacceptable behavior like drinking a lot.
To sum up, as matter of fact youths are fans of famous people and like to be famous more than adults but because they do not have enough experience to deal with problem and they cannot handle them and maybe the make another problem for themselves. I believe despite of this we should proper ourselves to accept famous youth more and more.

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Average: 7.8 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent has many side effects each society. Some people believe that it's a sig...
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Line 2, column 20, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...er of natural life. It is obvious that most of people in the world like to rich to the high l...
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Line 2, column 271, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'ability'?
Suggestion: ability
...e that youths have a powerful potential abilities naturally and when we prepare infrastru...
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Line 2, column 532, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'creates'.
Suggestion: creates
...founder of Facebook was a young when he create Facebook and now Facebook is a one of b...
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Line 2, column 574, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
...eate Facebook and now Facebook is a one of best computer applications in the world and ...
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Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
... the youngest signer in the world bring a lots of problem like accident and so on beca...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of problems'.
Suggestion: lots of problems
...he youngest signer in the world bring a lots of problem like accident and so on because he do u...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...blem like accident and so on because he do unacceptable behavior like drinking a l...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...with problem and they cannot handle them and maybe the make another problem for t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, for example, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66371681416 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46873930021 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486725663717 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6628708936 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.928571429 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263360470108 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101128913486 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769196176825 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16472693298 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464424263101 0.056905535591 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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