Some people believe that it is best to accept difficult situations such as having an unsatisfactory job or a lack of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
There are many who strive to achieve nothing but the best. There are some who hold the view that they should not strive for betterment and must be bound in terms of financial constraints and unsatisfied job. However, I completely support those who believe that change is highly possible and people must improve their financial and job related circumstances.
On the one hand, few can argue that people must remain in whatever bad situation they are and this is primarily for two reasons. Firstly, striving for a change whether financially or professionally could lead to worrisome situation such as debt payments and managing multiple jobs which in turn might force people to lead a stressful life. In South Asian countries, for example, the majority of the breadwinners are suffering huge financial constraints which is due to bank loans and a dead-end job they are involved in. Additionally, striving for a change could be bad in some scenarios as it is generally observed that several people who opt for such changes in haste, usually end up taking wrong profession related decisions leading to bankruptcy. Futher on, due to which they are even forced commit suicide.
Conversely, on the other hand I wholeheartedly support those who believe that taking calculated risks is necessary for progress in any domain. People who make efforts in upgrading their lives and face the problems with due diligence, often achieve better professional and financial growth and live a high quality of life. To illustrate this, consider the example of Warren Buffet. He was a hawker and he found it extremely difficult to survive with low income and unstable job, therefore, he invested in stock market shares with a small amount. With the passage of time, his wealth accumulated and now he is the second richest person in the world. Moreover, my strongest opinion is based on market opportunities. People these days have ample amount of chances locally and globally in almost every domain. Hence, they can opt for such change which could be beneficial in terms of job satisfaction and financial stability.
To conclude, although striving for change could be less stressful for some, Yet, for many other as well as me, such life changing decisions can come with colossal benefits. Therefore, favouring the spirit of the people who work towards improving their conditions and thereby can be of great help in changing the bleak fate of the entire Nation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... profession related decisions leading to bankruptcy. Futher on, due to which they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, for example, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0794044665 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71892368035 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560794044665 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.84285967 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.722222222 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16042033126 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507898530884 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321576442146 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102978682728 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180712460517 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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