Some people believe the range of technology available to individuals today is increasing the gap between poor people and rich people. Others think it is having an opposite effect. Discuss these points of view. What is your opinion?

In the twenty-first century, there have been many opinions about the progress in technology. Some argue that these new achievements have created a space amid people who are not at the same level of wealth. Others claim that the new inventions decrease the distance. From my point of view, both of these views have some logical reasons to consider, and we cannot deny that technology is trying to make human life easier.

On the one hand, people who live in wealthy countries receive the latest modern technology. To illustration, mobiles, laptops, the high-speed Internet, and the most vital medical treatments which are prepared easily for them. Even though there are mark differences between affluent and deprived individuals amenities, the aim of technology is to be available for all the mankind.

On the other hand, in the past people used to have many problems in the way of searching a good source for their studies, but today most people around the world have this opportunity to reach the best libraries and science articles online. in the other side, in the new world money can make restrictions to have the facilities.

Taking all the points into consideration, it looks to me that use of progressive devices is very attractive and interesting, but the expenditure we paid for them is in consonance with the property, as a recommendation for making better societies, there are some features of technology are used in medical problems should not be in high cost and be reachable for all.

Votes
Average: 6 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95817490494 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77281006886 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596958174905 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.442381014 49.4020404114 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 163.0 106.682146367 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.875 20.7667163134 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186918638043 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808314717165 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376071360466 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106512293408 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532382474195 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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