Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of th

The informal job like medical or education are being overlooked and paid with measly salary campared to the hollywood star or film maker in general. However, in my perspective, i totally disagree to this notion that who is renowned as an actors or their agency company should be paid generously.

First of all, being on film and renowned by the public required extremely perfect outlook. To fit in a certain appearance of the movie character, the actor have to undergo an extreme diet and overloaded physic exertion , which bearing a burden that nurse, doctor, or teacher might have never come through. This may cause negative impact on them both physically and mentally, and many cases that they had been caught into digestive issues or sleep isomnia. For example, to play the role of Thor in Avengers; endgame, Chris hemsworth consumed 2000 calories a day without exercising so that he can meet with Thor's fat body shape and it costs him several months after to regain his ordinary body. And whenever celebrities gain weight, or begin the aging process, the audience or public await for dragging them down by mean words and gossip.Thus, engaging in acting has never been easy like people thought, it demands hardship and strong determination to get the appropriate appearance for each role they take.

Secondly, being famous and widely recognised equal to have their private life come under light, while other professions could never be coherent and experience. As a celebrities, they have to bear in mind that paparazzi would ubiquitously stalk them and capture every moments. The uglier and more sentimental the moment is, like dating or smoking, the more views and attention it would get. Even their life partner or marriage life would be exploit as much as possible because when they are famous, the puplic also tend to have fond of their daily life of a normal human being. For example, a famous married couple like Bradd Bitt and Jennifer Hudson had met controversy and rude comments when they decided to split apart in 2010 since many fans had been expecting and admiring to their relationship. In short, actor would sacrificed their own socialised life so that they deserve a higher salary than any profession else.

To conclude, people think that the salary of nurse,doctor or teaching jobs is unequal while comparing with the one of celebrity, however i fervently believe that is fair enough due to the beauty standard that actors are forced to fit in and their sacrifaction of comfortable life.

Votes
Average: 9.6 (3 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an actor' or simply 'actors'?
Suggestion: an actor; actors
... to this notion that who is renowned as an actors or their agency company should be paid ...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...reme diet and overloaded physic exertion , which bearing a burden that nurse, doct...
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Line 3, column 837, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...ging them down by mean words and gossip.Thus, engaging in acting has never been easy...
^^^^
Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a celebrity' or simply 'celebrities'?
Suggestion: a celebrity; celebrities
...ld never be coherent and experience. As a celebrities, they have to bear in mind that paparaz...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 823, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'sacrifice'
Suggestion: sacrifice
...eir relationship. In short, actor would sacrificed their own socialised life so that they ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 51, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , doctor
...e, people think that the salary of nurse,doctor or teaching jobs is unequal while compa...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, in general, in short, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 10.4138276553 269% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 420.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99047619048 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56874716178 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621428571429 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9938214492 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.714285714 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165331732967 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549436564483 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433381571994 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103848151478 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051445282017 0.056905535591 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.