Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don’t really need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new product that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?
It is true that advertisement informs people about new products that may improve their lives, while it can be argued that the advertising encourages to buy unnecessary items. I will analyze both ideas through this essays.
The advertisement has brought enormous profit for companies. For example, if a company manufactures a new product, they will advertise to customers, which means that people will have more choice when buying and the company can make a lot of money from it. Second, with different sorts of advertisement, customers will be provided more information and knowledge about the product. Moreover, there are many companies in fierce competition in recent years, so that people will have more options to choose the quality products.
On the other hand, I believe that there are still many harmful impacts created by ads. If a person who gets addicted to buying online, they could purchase expensive and fake stuffs easily because they will not see the product in the real life until it is ordered to their address. Furthermore, nowadays, children and teenagers are the victims of shopping online, as a result, they are easy to be influenced by the exaggerate advertisement.
In conclusion, I think that if people watch advertisement by the right way, they will not be manipulated by the distort and exaggerate advertisement. The government and community must aware of the harmful advertisement so as not to be mislead to waste money on buying unnecessary products.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'buying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: buying
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...esult they are easy to be influenced by the exaggerate advertisement In conclusion I think ...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ght way they will not be manipulated by the distort and exaggerate advertisement The govern...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1220.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0622406639 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85686379972 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55601659751 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 241.0 20.2975951904 1187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1220.0 106.682146367 1144% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 241.0 20.7667163134 1161% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 137.0 7.06120827912 1940% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223358317254 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.223358317254 0.084324248473 265% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152361438931 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687053208524 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 122.9 13.0946893788 939% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -173.14 50.2224549098 -345% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 97.3 11.3001002004 861% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.55 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 18.87 8.58950901804 220% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 9.78957915832 603% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 98.4 10.1190380762 972% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 123.0 10.7795591182 1141% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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