Some people say that all secondary and higher secondary school students should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with this argument?

Money management is an imperative skill not only for working professionals but also for secondary students. Some people think that this skill must be developed in them. I completely agree that this skill has a myriad of benefits down the road.

Firstly, extra spending could be reduced if students understand the value of money. They often splurge inordinate amount of money on unnecessary things such as games, multicolor pens, etc as they are not aware of the efforts which their parents put to earn it. By teaching them the importance of money, this money spending on useless items could be curbed upto an extent. Take Australia for example, where teachers often teach financial management skills to the students from the primary class. As a result, they usually don’t pester their parents to buy unwanted things for them.

Secondly, secondary students can save money for their future by learning money management skill. This is because they usually depend on their parents for their higher education fees and other expenditures. By understanding the essential benefits of this skill, they can save some amount of money from their pocket money for their future needs. For example, after secondary education, many students often take admissions in the universities for their higher studies and the fees of such courses are astronomical. Many parents usually take loans to fulfill the learning dream of their children. However, this situation can be avoided by inculcating money saving skill in the students. Thus, not only can they save some money for their higher education, but they can also support their parents financially.

In conclusion, not only students can limit themselves from overspending, but they can also save some money for their future by learning about money management. Therefore, I feel that this skill must be taught to the secondary and higher secondary students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...as a myriad of benefits down the road. Firstly, extra spending could be reduced...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26644736842 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63967299649 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476973684211 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.220799661 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1764705882 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8823529412 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25451944367 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113208143488 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809286859847 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20663598519 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615414278575 0.056905535591 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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