some people say that art subjects such as music drama and creative writing are essential part of education and every school should include them in its syllabus do you agree or disagree with this statement give your opinion and examples

Art subjects should be included in school education is a controversial topic that often causes debate among both parents and educators. Some people believe that art subjects are not highly important in the syllabus while many insist that should incorporate into the curriculum. I definitely agree with this point of view since not only relieves the pressure of study, but it also helps to cultivate students other interests.

Firstly, the competition is fierce and there is increasing knowledge need to be learned in recent years which cause the school curriculum has become tense in order to keep pace with the times. Some schools even reduce the extracurricular activities time for a student to achieve good grades. Under the high pressure of learning that learning knowledge other than books will help them reduce stress and help strengthen their thinking.

Secondly, a student can develop their interest and inspire their potential by studying art subjects. For an instance, most people will use music to reduce stress and relax. So, who actually composes the repertoire? If students are taught that they are talented in music through the music lesson, they will be able to engage in music-related jobs even they don’t get good grades in their studies.

In conclusion, well goes an old saying “every trade has its master.” There are many different types of jobs in society that require different talents. Student exposure to different disciplines including art subjects when they are still studying allows them to plan ahead for their future and let them reduce the pressure of learning today.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 80, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1356.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23552123552 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60269465535 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617760617761 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9693568506 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196753489386 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673454508487 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490126006215 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117680360427 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680237357815 0.056905535591 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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