Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time Others say that it is important for children to learn how to preoccupy themselves Discuss both these views and and give your opinion

It is considered by some that motivating their offsprings to participate in group events such as academic exhibitions, sports competitions is the perfect way of parenting. Many argue about the importance of children learning to manage their schedule themselves based on what matters to them. While both of these views are valid to some extent, I personally believe that parents should follow a balanced approach by giving equal importance to both group activities and personal space, which I will be discussing in this essay.

I will first discuss why elders stress upon the importance of involving their children in social activities. Making new friends, knowing how to express their feelings are the major advantages that this approach brings. From my own personal experience, I can vouch to say that I have grown up to be a socially comfortable person because I enjoyed working with new people since my childhood. In addition, children will eventually understand the significant role working as a team has on their personality development.

Now, let me discuss why some prefer to leave their children to their own. This is thought so by parents thinking that doing so will help their kids learn to figure out themselves about how to utilise the time effectively. As per a famous child psychiatrist Dr. Willams, 45% of the children grow up to be dependent on others and tend to become stressed when they have to deal with tough situations. Such behavior has roots from their interactions with people from their childhood. So, had the children given enough opportunity to handle themselves on their own, they would become independent as they grow up.

To conclude, both of the views make sense in their own, but I personally think that balance between both these practices is crucial in healthy upbringing of a child. While participating in group activities adds value to the children by developing networking and teamwork skills, it is equally important to teach them the importance of being able to face any circumstance independently.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, while, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13173652695 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89689805801 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577844311377 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6425776875 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.428571429 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35714285714 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374573325913 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124873782493 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510628089447 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22155031333 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522526333086 0.056905535591 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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