Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both view and give your own op

In this era of technological advancements, children spend most of their spare time playing video games or on social media. Not getting involved in any physical activity or going out starts to take its toll on youngsters’ bodies as well as on their minds in the long run. Understanding these detrimental effects, some parents motivate their offspring to get involved in group activities such as summer camp, etc. in their leisure time. While some may be in agreement with this thought, others may contradict and advocate giving space to the children so that they could engage themselves in their favorite activities.

Firstly, the fact that children spend more time on computers than getting involved in outdoor activities cannot be denied. In such scenarios, it becomes significant for the parents to involve youngsters forcefully in outdoor activities. That way, parents can also keep an eye on them, and children get a chance to socialize with others and to make new friends outside the virtual world.

Next, though the internet and various types of gadgets have become a crucial part of some children’s lives, we can argue that some children are still untouched by these worldly things and like to spend their free time doing different learning activities. They have an introvert nature and prefer to keep their businesses to themselves. They find no joy in group activities and become miserable if forced to participate. Hence, such children should be given the choice to spend their time the way they like.

Lastly, not all children’s nature is alike. While some of them may be introverts and prefer to spend their leisure time with their close friends, others may be extroverts and may like to attend social gatherings and activities. In both cases, parents should ensure to be not intrusive beyond a limit and respect their privacy.

In essence, though children should be motivated to participate in group activities and socialize, they shouldn’t be forced to do this. In my opinion, youngsters should be handled as per their preferences and extreme measures should be taken only in the case of rigidness. They should be given choices to spend their free time the way they like but regular checks also should be kept in order to know if they are involved in productive activities or just killing their time by doing insignificant things.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, may, so, still, well, while, such as, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11568123393 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80154472814 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516709511568 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5839966194 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.555555556 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31588263457 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118892416108 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496717200186 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198293606935 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575119849837 0.056905535591 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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