Throughout the past decade the quantity of children with obesity has drastically increased. Furthermore, a significant amount of people are convinced that government is responsible for the infants' obesity. Nevertheless, the opponents think that relatives should care about weight of their children. Personally, I think that infants' overweight is parents responsibility.
On the one hand, it is claimed that government should take a responsibility of obesity in children. In other words the result of overweight in children should be mentored/controlled by government via a restriction to eat junk food in schools. Moreover, a paper published by Dr Robert Watson, a world-renowned specialist, reveals that the reason of infant's obesity is that more than 58% of children are eating fast food in schools. Therefore, this instance has bolstered the existing belief that government should tackle this problem via limitation of junk food for pupils.
As an alternative point of view it is argued that parents should care about weight of their infants. That is to say that relatives should introduce some physical exercises for children. It can be illustrated by the latest research, conducted by Cambridge University which elucidated the fact that absence of sport in family life leads to the increasing level of a children's obesity. Overall, it is clearly seen that the idea of introducing an active games or sports into family leads to a decreasing rate of infant's overweight.
Taking all these points into consideration, it can be concluded that governments as well as parents are responsible for children's weight. Although, I assume that parents should be more mindful to infants' obesity and introduce more active games in their life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'infants'' or 'infant's'?
Suggestion: infants'; infant's
... that government is responsible for the infants obesity. Nevertheless, the opponents th...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... limitation of junk food for pupils. As an alternative point of view it is argu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, i think, as well as, in other words, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40441176471 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17775539104 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1281731888 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126558431079 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540236253767 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559781376042 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866686691727 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548443837553 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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