Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which type of workers do you think should benefit from early requirement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Every working individual takes permanent leave from work and gets paid for the services they have done for their company in their retirement age with a pension. However, some sociologists believe that having a fixed retirement age for everybody irrespective of their occupation is unfair. I completely agree with this argument.
To begin with, people tend to become weak as they grow older. Certainly, different occupations demand different kinds of skills. Perhaps, certain workers need physical strength to perform their duties and therefore, this reduce their age. While other occupations like office work demands less physical energy. Hence, workers whose work demands more physical energy need to be given an early retirement. For instance, workers in coal mine whose work demands strength and stamina which deteriorates as they grow older. On the other side, workers sitting in a library do not need to have much need of physical strength.
In addition, certain workers who have dedicated most of their life working for a same company should be allowed to reap the benefits of retirement at an early age. Moreover, employer should provide them good pension so that, their rest of the life pass out without a struggle. For example, my grand-father started working for a company in India at the age of 20. He was allowed to take early retirement by considering the tenure of his work in the company and he still receives the pension on time as well.
In conclusion, common retirement age for all kinds of workers is unfair. Precisely, the workers whose work demands more core body strength or the one who have served their company for a longer duration should be allowed to take early retirement with pension as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05263157895 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58925972586 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0958768461 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8125 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320780696208 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114363395712 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083105173472 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211009238431 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357949039532 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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