Some people think that having a set of retirement age (e.g, 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an early age.
Do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that government set retirement age (for instance 65 years) for all their citizens without concerning the career is prejudicial. So they think that certain occupation needs to have flexibility of early retirement. I completely agree with this assertion.
To begin with, there is variety of reasons why people think that setting a retirement age regardless of job categories is unfair. Firstly, it is obvious/undeniable that many occupation necessitate extreme physical and mental activities to achieve certain goals. This could make them exhausted before reaching that age. For example, coal miners or welder could find it difficult to do hard work at their older age. Secondly, many senior person hold their high position for a long time in the company, it might limit the opportunities for young people who are full of energy and creativity.
I strongly believe that in certain occupations, workers deserve to retire and get a pension at early age. Especially those who are working in physically demanding conditions or in high stressful positions should be in early retirement group. This is because their health issues/problems might not allow them to follow the work, such as construction workers or Emergency medical practitioners. Furthermore, in order to gain the fairest arrangement for every occupation, the earlier pension that they receive must be calculated based on their contribution to the society.
In conclusion, It seems to me that a fixed retirement age without categorizing the jobs is unfair and workers in certain careers have a right to receive an earlier pension based on their contribution.
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- You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you will not be available on that date. Task: Write a letter to your new boss, explaining your situation, expressing your concern and suggesting a solution. 73
- Some people think that having a set of retirement age e g 65 years for everybody regardless of occupation is unfair They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an early age Do you agree or disagree 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun occupation seems to be countable; consider using: 'many occupations'.
Suggestion: many occupations
... Firstly, it is obvious/undeniable that many occupation necessitate extreme physical and mental...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36821705426 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08804800843 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612403100775 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5726223222 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.538461538 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8461538462 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471868018758 0.244688304435 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149875431978 0.084324248473 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116191470386 0.0667982634062 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281337008485 0.151304729494 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06178457655 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.