Some people think that the main purpose of school is to turn children to good citizens and workers, rather than benefit them as individuals.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that the main purpose of school is to turn children to good citizens and workers, rather than benefit them as individuals.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is obvious that an increasing number of people have realized the importance of education, while the main aim of education has sparked massive debates. Some people argue that schools should put more emphasis on turning younger generation into qualified citizens and workers, rather than focusing on their own benefits. From my own perspective, I agree that the main purpose of education is supposed to be cultivating qualified community members.

It is acknowledged that in most countries, governments spend a large amount of expenditure on public education every year. From governments’ perspective, qualified citizens are the key to a prosperous and stable society. By providing education, children will be equipped with all the essential knowledge to preparing them for the adult society in the future. They learn academic knowledge in order to secure employment and make a living after graduation; they will be taught to moral value and laws so as to know how to behave properly. As a result, these well-educated and law-abiding citizens can make positively contribution to society.

As for individuals, they also benefit from “good citizenship education”. At school, children can receive knowledge systematically. Teachers in schools are well-trained to provide students with knowledge and guidance. Through school education, children can be prepared for their future life. In addition, characters of being a qualified citizen such as honesty, hard-working and disciplined can help them to gain credit in every aspect in their life.

In conclusion, schools should aim atcultivating children to become qualified society members, but individuals will also benefit from school education.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 505, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... will be taught to moral value and laws so as to know how to behave properly. As a resul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, as for, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69260700389 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23278636156 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607003891051 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4641283052 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205539564031 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674163031817 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543349325858 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126126431827 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610813866114 0.056905535591 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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