Some people think that the most important function of music is to help people relax To what extent do you agree or disagree

Music is another synonym for relaxation. Many people believe that music plays an essential part in their life. For a number of reasons, some people think that music is important, and the following essay will explain them in details.

On one hand, I believe that music is invented to reduce stress in terms of physical or mental. There are many advantages due to this Firstly, people who are working as drivers always listen to songs to kill their boring time in driving. Secondly, children who are studying for exams take breaks and listen to music to relax their minds and to kick start again.
On the other hand, the music will improve the business in the shopping malls, departmental stores or shops. The shop keepers will keep a piece of light music which makes the customer feel soften their mind and will spend some more time to see the goods in the shop and also stay for a longer time to buy things. Besides, music will affect people's performances. The fast beat music will indeed impact the athletes' performance in competitions that’s why the songs are displayed at the time of training or game competitions. Lastly, slow instrumental music will indeed help people to release stress that’s the reason the spa, yoga, and massage centers always keep this type of music.

In conclusion, music indeed plays a vital role in our ways of life, as music can affect our mindset and emotions. And then music can be used as a source of income as well, therefore, we must appreciate music and enjoy it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 404, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'athletes'' or 'athlete's'?
Suggestion: athletes'; athlete's
... fast beat music will indeed impact the athletes performance in competitions that’s why ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1250.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75285171103 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3709716878 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574144486692 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3354613836 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1538461538 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203192848535 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841251894186 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534846332665 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129910510728 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519132321305 0.056905535591 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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