Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment.
To what extent do you agree?
There is an issue about the severity of penalty for immature offenders. Some prosecutors believe that court should assign them adult punishment. This essay disagrees with their point of view.
Let us start with reasons why some prosecutors state young offenders should be sentenced as grownups. The first reason is that it will deter young people from breaking a law. Most children will think carefully before committing crimes, such as pickpocketing and robbing, because court will sentence them as severely as adults. Another reason is that more victims will be content with the verdict. The people, who suffer the crime, will find justice, when the jury punish their offenders with no excuse for their age. Furthermore, it will spare much time and effort for the court. Court will no longer spend much time considering special cases involving children as criminals, since it will judge them as usually as adults criminals.
However, some social workers advocate that youngsters should not receive the punishments intended for adults. Firstly, juvenile delinquents will learn more heavy crimes in prison. The imprisonment of teenagers means that they will rub shoulders with serious criminals, so they will acquire more offensive skills and, subsequently, become more dangerous to society later. Secondly, it will ruin the future of children. Many juvenile offenders will be unable to finish their education and, consequently, get employment, so they will have to make a living by breaking a law again. Moreover, young offenders normally are unaware of justice system. Many children do not know when they commit a crime as well as what will happen to them, if they perpetrate an offence, so it is unfair to assign them the same penalty as adults.
In conclusion, although some prosecutors suggest using the same penalties against teenage criminals as against grownups, I think that soft punishment should be in use against them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 763, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to them, if they perpetrate an offence, so it is unfair to assign them the same ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2783171521 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63550460473 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601941747573 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2818691528 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6111111111 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.9879759519 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142949856264 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453913000532 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507508519617 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928104435945 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00758917837866 0.056905535591 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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