Some people think that we live in a society where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that this is improving our lives.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the modern world, being financially stable has become an integral part of our lives. There is a contentious argument amongst some people as they believe being wealthy is of utmost importance whilst others believe that money and possession are given unnecessary attention. This essay will elicit both the points along with my own perspective.
To commence, being cash rich and owning assets can lead to a better standard of living. When a person has good finance to sponsor their day-to-day requirement it can lead them to better prospects in life. For instance, people will tend to spend more on hygienic food and luxurious apartments. Furthermore, people will start investing excess money in the business which will create job opportunities as well as there will be a surge in demand and supply of products which will result in a bull market.
On the other hand, there are a few shortcomings of residing in a society which gives more weightage to money and possessions as this creates an urge in the people to earn more and it will develop an environment where they will not spend a quality family time. Moreover, if people are not prudent about the overconsumption of things than there will be plethora of waste in the society.
In conclusion, I believe both the points have merits. On balance, it is my opinion that wealth can immensely impact the society and can lead to a better future. This is because there will be liquidity in market and businesses will keep progressing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 89, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...an lead to a better standard of living. When a person has good finance to sponsor th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1243.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91304347826 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72326565914 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577075098814 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7597040005 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.583333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0833333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18421204161 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676664411935 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573805251458 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126396159806 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704935650245 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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