Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Nowadays more and more successful sportsmen and athletes gain significant amounts of wealth. Some think that this is unjust to representatives of other vital trades, what is, from my point of view, definitely untrue and this essay will illustrate it discussing both points of view and supporting them with relevant examples from medicine and skiing.
To begin with, there are a lot of professions that may seem to be worth achieving greater amount of recognition and reward, such as firefighters, policemen and surgeons. The main reason for such an opinion is that all of aforementioned occupations contribute greatly to humanity saving lives on literally daily basis. For instance, recent report of medicine faculty of MSU revealed, that more than 1000 life-saving operations were carried out last year only in single taken Prigov clinic in Moscow. Compared to any athlete’s, such a contribution is noticeably remarkable and important.
On the other hand, an effective period of any sports person career is rather short, and taking in account the discipline and dedication they put on altar, paychecks received are minor relief. Money earned during this span of time often should provide their living for the rest of their lives. And what is more, professionals are often exposed to built-up traumas due to extreme training they have to pass through. Take as example Bode Miller, a famous USA skier who won world championship in 2003 and was not able to show competitive results in 2006 due to age and problems with his knees. Thus after his retirement from skiing he, as many other sportsmen, have to rely on wealth taken during his best years.
To conclude, although it may falsely seem that life-saving lines of employment deserve a better payoff than people in sports, those rewards and prize money that athletes receive may be the only ones they get throughout their life. Therefore it is more than just contribution for their sacrifice of time and own health. It is predicted that by the year 2200 less successful sportspersons will receive a special pension that would allow reduce striatal gap between champions and underdogs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, to begin with, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13142857143 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78458731783 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648571428571 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.1401136535 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.285714286 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182114348712 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493319526951 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04293695701 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100975881367 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576829652989 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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