Writing Task 2 (an essay)
Nowadays advertisements of toys and fast food mostly focus on children. Some think that eventually it affects both children and their family. Do you agree or disagree?
In today's era, Advertisement are ubiquitous and growing like a mushroom. Some opine that advertisements affects both children and their family. I, am personally, agree with this statement. In this essay I will discuss my views.
Advertising industry are focusing on childrens by showing advertisement of toys and fast food which affects the children miserably as they are vulnerable and easily affected by these advertisements and put pressure on their parents to fulfill their demand. If parents are unable to meet their requirements they are motivated to do petty crimes like chain snatching and pit pocketing.
Moreover, fast food and lots of toys are not advisable for childrens health and holistic development. Fast food in daily life of childrens lead to obesity and it's a root cause of many diseases. If child have more toys they will not virtue like share, playing in team.
On the other hand, parents always want to fulfill all wishes of their children and to do the same they have to do more work which make them workaholic and they can't enjoy their personal life. More workaholic nature can invite many problems like tension, anxiety, high blood pressure etc.
To put in a nutshell, from above arguements its proove that advertisements of toys and fast food affects both children and their family.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ork which make them workaholic and they cant enjoy their personal life. More workaho...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1104.0 1615.20841683 68% => OK
No of words: 217.0 315.596192385 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08755760369 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74655924284 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 506.74238477 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.116726735 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0833333333 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91666666667 7.06120827912 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383329433118 0.244688304435 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142719294581 0.084324248473 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134851051393 0.0667982634062 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228012952432 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834391981292 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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