131) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Money and Success are two different aspects of everyone's life. Money is essential for us to survive. It provides us basic necessities and help us lead out lives comfortably. Success on the other hand is personal. The definition of begin successful varies based on the kind of person and the environment he lives in. Let me give some examples to illustrate this.

Firstly, Let us consider Bill Gates. He is the worlds richest person in terms of assets and money. He built a software empire and most of the worlds personal computers use Windows Operating System. He is also philanthropically active. He spends a large sum of money on research and development of backward communities worldwide. He spends a lot of money on education of kids and young adults. He is considered a successful person having earnt a lot money and using it wisely.

Next, Let us consider the case of Charles Chaplin. Name a person in the world who does not know who Charlie Chaplin was. His theatrics, his silent movies, his actions, his charm, took over everyone in the world. He famously quoted, "You only need power if you want to hurt someone, for everything else, Love is sufficient". He did not earn a lot of money in his career. But Charles Chaplin is considered to be one of the most famous and successful comedians world wide.

Having looked at two case, let us consider the case of Steve Jobs as our third example. Steve Jobs was the founder of three most noted companies - Apple, Pixar and Next. He was fired from his own company all three times. He as a kid, had to face hardships in life. But his persistence and attention to detail, made him deliver some of the most famous and beautiful iProducts - namely iPhone, iPad, iPod. Steve Jobs is considered to be a technology genius in his own aspect.

With these examples, I'd like to state that just earning loads of money does not make one successful. We can continue with many more examples and noted personalities like Einstien, Boson, Srinivasa Ramanujam, Sir. C.V. Raman, Mother Teresa who was extraordinary in their own aspects. Success is what one defines for himself and achievements he has in his life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, so, third, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79144385027 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73726939306 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572192513369 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.9615042432 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.7931034483 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.8965517241 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55172413793 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114266975798 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0330778658906 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421437347604 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0674418952778 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408627166978 0.0645574589148 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.61 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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