Depending on personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, we find that some people hold the idea that art and music are also need to be studied by younger school children besides math language, science as well as history, whereas others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I disagree with the former statement.
First of all, it is always top of the list of my viewpoints that younger school children should learn more about how to have fun rather than bury themselves in the heavy load of study. In other word, during their early stages of life, they need to have more fun by themselves and learn a lot from it. To make my demonstration more profoundly and comprehensively, I would like to cite what one of my favorite celebrities has mentioned,” All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.” A good case in point is Jenney, a friend of mine, who know everything about the class but nothing about how to have fun.
Moreover, art and music contribute little to human’s success from the perspective of the long history of our humanity’s life. Consequently, allocating the time on art and music does not make sense for younger school children. Let’s take an extreme case for example, the emergence of internet takes everyone of us to the information era, but how about romantic art and jazz? It seems nothing they have bring to me but fun.
Admittedly, it may be true that study of art and music does help younger school children to establish a philosophy that centers on creating a sense which works in alliance with beauty rather than only subdue it to humanity’s will. But if this factor is contemplated, the advantages of learning art and music could be overlooked.
ALL in all, although some people may still remain unconvinced, the factors I have analyzed could at least make them more aware of the various dimensions of issue under discussion. There is little doubt that more and more people will come to realize that it does not necessary for younger school children add time for learning music and art to the time spend on math language, science and history.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: brought
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, well, whereas, at least, for example, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75749318801 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69289224792 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553133514986 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.9019971117 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.307692308 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2307692308 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6923076923 5.45110844103 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242442987714 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887691421298 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853627626127 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148730350955 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622540148097 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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