Only when the last river dries up, and humans realize that we cannot drink money, only then we are going to understand the importance of the environment. Personally, I think that the human needs of development are secondary to saving endangered animals. Nature is the one that provides us with resources in the first place, and I am going to explain my viewpoint in the following essay.
First, endangered species are important parts of the ecosystem. Much often, animals which are key to habitats are the most vulnerable and end up in danger lists. Moreover, the role they play in the wild is what makes them so important, without them, probably we could not farm in the first place. I will put my personal experience as an example, in my home country crabs are very desired as food and people used to fish them without control. Not so many years ago, they were almost extinct, and the ecosystem fell out of balance, affecting fishing activities. In the end, conservation measures had to be implemented and was at this point people realized the whole importance of the species.
Furthermore, humans only want more and more with no regarding of the consequences. We treat this planet like it is ours, but, in reality, we are only momentary passengers. This kind of thinking is what has gotten us in such deep problems as climate change or water shortages. For instance, all of us have witnessed how natural catastrophes are more and more frequent, Ecuador’s earthquake, Indonesia’s tsunami, it seems like we are getting back all the damage we have done.
For all of the points drawn above, I think that human needs come second to the conservation of Earth and its species. Nature grants us goods, and we should reciprocate, in addition, we cannot continue to indulge the destructive mindset that we have had until now. In the end, this is the only planet we can live in, so we should care for it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 5, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ack all the damage we have done. For all of the points drawn above, I think that human ...
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Line 5, column 61, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs come" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'come' or 'to be come'.
Suggestion: come; to be come
...s drawn above, I think that human needs come second to the conservation of Earth and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, moreover, regarding, second, so, then, for instance, i think, in addition, kind of, in my view, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78247734139 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75466415815 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586102719033 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5307833679 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9375 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6875 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151022225776 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572142390702 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569556965453 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0933618720304 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176836024059 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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