First contact is the most influential contact and in the first contact the first judgment would be on the appearance. Some people tend to respect other people based on their exterior look while others do not maintain it as an apt criteria for assessing other people. Although the appearance of a person shows the personality of him/her to somehow but in my point of view, it is not people’s choice so they should not be judged based on that.
Everyone inherits some characteristics from his/her parent including appearance characteristics like a beautiful or an ugly face or being tall or short, etc. And no one has chosen to be born in which family. Thus most parts of our appearance are not our choice. Therefor we have no right to rate people based on their outward features.
Moreover is the impact of the environment. People’s appearance like other specifications would be affected by the environment in which they have been born, raised and lived. As mentioned above, people do not choose where to be born and also where to be grown up. Besides, because of some financial limitations most of people cannot choose freely the place they live or they have not many opportunities for their career. So we could say that the environment also is not a choice for most of people. For example a person who have grown up in a poor family and have not the chance to go to university and in adulthood will become a factory worker, have not chosen most part of his life path. So comparing a worker based on his clothing _for instance_ with a successful manager _with luxury clothes_ is not fair.
To sum it up, I believe most of the outward appearances are not our choice so people must not be judged based on that.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'criterion'?
Suggestion: criterion
...ile others do not maintain it as an apt criteria for assessing other people. Although th...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n ugly face or being tall or short, etc. And no one has chosen to be born in whic...
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Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... has chosen to be born in which family. Thus most parts of our appearance are not ou...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ple based on their outward features. Moreover is the impact of the environment. Peopl...
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Line 5, column 316, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
..., because of some financial limitations most of people cannot choose freely the place they liv...
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Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...he environment also is not a choice for most of people. For example a person who have grown up...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69078947368 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72876464901 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519736842105 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2684917988 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0666666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0585192504546 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0212125058373 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269930323778 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0371722829603 0.150856017488 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178007742215 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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