Television is one of the most significant inventions of humans since the dawn of civilization. No one can deny that watching television has its pros and cons and influences people's lives. I firmly believe that the disadvantages of watching movies and TV outweighs its advantages since it negatively affects people's learning and mental health.
First of all, watching TV and movies directly influences the learning ability of people, especially children. Kids spend several hours every day watching films and cartoons, while they should do their homework. Sometimes they stay up all night to watch a program, avoiding going to bed. So, they will be sleepy and tired the next morning at school and do not understand a single teacher's word. Thus, they cannot learn when they did not listen and understand. Consequently, children's learning ability will diminish due to watching TV for several hours. I have to admit that my personal experience has profoundly affected my opinion on this matter. When I was younger at middle school, I often spent my evenings watching movies when my parents were not home. The next days were the most difficult days of my life. I always had problems opening my eyes, and I could not learn anything. That year, I ended up passing my courses with the minimum grades, leading to being deprived of money for that summer.
A second but equally noticeable factor that damages the young's behavior is the mental impacts of TV and movies. Today, films and TV programs often consist of violent or sexual content that is not appropriate for kids. However, they usually watch these programs by neglecting the age alerts, while their parents do not care about their child's attitude. Kids have a sensitive, under-developed mind which can readily be effected by extreme pictures. Sometimes it has irreversible, traumatic damage on the youth's brain. So, they learn these behaviors and perform or imitate them at school with their classmates, having no idea what they are doing. Its effects usually are revealed in the future by turning the child into an unstoppable, angry animal that ruins and hurts everything. For instance, a friend of mine who was always into scary brutal films is in jail now because of destroying the state infrastructures. After they interrogated him, he confessed that he has mental issues since his childhood. If he had not seen those films in the past, he would not have seen himself in prison today.
To draw the conclusion grounded on the above statements, I subscribe to the idea that the adverse effects of watching films and TV are more than positive ones. That is because they decrease people's learning and mental health.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement it s better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a sense of humor 70
- Parents involved with their children s education 60
- Agree or disagree Today parents are more involved in their children s education than in the past 60
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours 70
- In today s world it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct 85
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 657, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...o idea what they are doing. Its effects usually are revealed in the future by turning the c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01348314607 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67317893537 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559550561798 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8073336252 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.8076923077 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1153846154 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137231251397 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339338757013 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044005607116 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0879127416744 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397560410838 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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