Agree or disagree a child should start part-times from young age
One of the most important periods in one's life is teenage experiences, as it leads one to build characteristics, behavior and shapes one's ensuing life. Hence, one of the most controversial issues amongst many parents is whether to let their children engage in part-time jobs or not. As far as I am concerned in the state of ambivalence, I might lean toward part-time job encouragement. Conceivably, some people believe that children should spend their time on other serious activities, however, there are many reasons such as the money management improvement and communication-skills enhancement which can declare a beneficiary of taking a part-time job. I will interpret my statement in the following essay.
First, money management skills are advantageous due to the valuable money amounts one can save using them. Doubtlessly, the money help to broaden the enjoyment one can have spent the money and will enrich one's personality if well-spent. To build such financial abilities one needs to engage in economic activities from a young age; activities such as part-time jobs, volunteer tasks, etc. which can not be built in a short amount of time. Granted, a child needs to have fun, but a child without money cannot freely experience many activities. As an illustrative example, some years ago when I attended high school at Beheshti school in Iran, I had a colleague named Sara. Sara had plenty amount of part-times and in the beginning, everyone assumed that she will fail in the exams and her life will be ruined, but it was not true. Fortunately, she used her savings to buy many books to educate herself and make her own market. She was meant to be a useless adolescent, but her life did not go as everyone claimed. As one can see, part-time works influence money management skills which are associated with financial supports.
Secondly, it is not presumptuous to judge one's communication skills according to the number of interactions that a person has experienced throughout life. No man can truly assume another's communication ability based on previous experiences, but a man who has gone through more interactions can communicate more effortlessly. A man who appears to talk feasibly might have spent plenty amount of time talking with others to achieve the ability. My personal experiences are the foundation of my next point. Engaging in a part-time job a child interacts with many people which influences the child's communication skills and is imperative to the possible influence that a child will have on society. Surely, it is wiser to let a child work and gain experience than to deny it.
I am of the conviction that one needs finance management skills and enhanced-communication capability to succeed. It is my personal suggestion and its effects are evident in financial savings and the influential role a person holds after doing part-time jobs. Regarded the aforementioned reasons, I conclude that a child should do part-time occupations, but a coin has two sides and an edge to connects them and my suggestion can be found not practical for many children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2592.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1124260355 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15273394616 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518737672584 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 824.4 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7227731192 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.79166666667 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196174291041 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553713014034 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611561895352 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125216930752 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133614343864 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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