Agree or disagree: It is more important for the government to spend money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds.
People often possess different perspectives on what is more important for the government to spend money on. While some believe that art museums and concerts are important, others argue that building recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds is more important. Based on my personal experiences and observation of my life, I think spending money on recreational facilities is more important.
First of all, governments care about the budget, and building playgrounds can save money. For example, (1)the local government of Hsinchu city has built 100 playgrounds. (2a)It only costs 100,000 US dollars to build all these playgrounds. Besides, (2b)the government only has to maintain the facility once a year. As a result, (3)building the playground costs little money for the government. However, (4)if the government decided to build a concert hall, (5)it would cost more than 2000,000 US dollars. Apparently, (6)the government would spend a lot of money on it.
Secondly, governments need to care about citizens' needs, and spending more money on recreational facilities will fulfill citizens' requirements. For instance,(1) when Taipei city built a new public swimming pool for their citizens,(2) a lot of people went to the station with their family because they wanted to keep in good shape. Therefore, (3)the swimming pool really meets citizens' needs. In contrast,(4) if the government spent money on the museum, (5)it would be criticized by citizens, because it requires a large amount of money to build and only few people want to see art work. (6) Thus, the citizens would not be satisfied by the decision.
Last but not least, governments require a reputation, and building recreational facilities can build up their reputation. For example,(1) after Hsinchu city built a lot of playgrounds, (2a)people who have kids liked to bring their children to the place. Under this circumstance, many parents could relax since they would not have to take care of their children.As a result, the government was praised by the citizens.
In conclusion,after taking all the factors into account. I strongly argue that it is more important for the government to spend money on recreational facilities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... praised by the citizens. In conclusion,after taking all the factors into account. I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27220630372 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97761370306 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550143266476 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8141039846 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.45 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.95 5.45110844103 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430263200059 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125355723736 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989860888442 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245960369175 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116205973588 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.