The importance of human needs such as farms, houses, and factories cannot be over emphasized. However, man's desire to satisfy them other than saving animals could lead to an enormous amount of deleterious effects if care is not taken. This is because animals play a very important role in the survival of the ecosystem (a natural system through which the activities of living things are kept in a delicate balance)at large. Therefore, I believe it is more important to use lands for saving endangered animals than for needs such as farming, housing and building of factories.
History has it documented that the presence or absence of certain animals in certain regions on the earth have played significant roles in the determination of what became of such regions after some years. For example desert encroachment was not so common thousands of years ago, when the number of birds which existed was relatively higher than what we have now. This is because some of them helped in distributing seeds of plants and trees. Consequently, trees and plants like the Dates tree grew in regions such as the today's sahara dessert and prevented the expansion of the desert for a long time. Additionally, the presence of large animals like the now extint Mammoth helped in preventing erosion in regions where they once lived. This was due to their large body mass which aided the solidification and packing of the soil as they moved around. Today, the soil in these regions is mostly loose and exposed to water and wind erosion. Hence, it is expedient that endangered are saved using available land.
Additionally, the presence of certain animals help in keeping the life-cycle in the ecosystem. A good example is the food web ( a chain of feeding which links various animals and plants). In the food web, certain animals serve as food for the other ones. Hence, different species of animals rely on the existent of others for their survival. Concequently, when one animal dies out, other animals in the food web could die out, leading to a massive level of extintion on the planet earth. In fact, this could eventually lead to Man's extintion, as humans also rely on the availability of plants and animals for survival. One could think that man would begin to live on plants if animals are wiped out. However, total reliance on plant would eventually lead to the absence of food and ultimately the extintion of man due to widespread hunger. It is clear that the use if land for the salvation of endangered animals is more important that other human needs which are mentioned above.
Conclusively, except a system which would integrate the salvation of endangeres animals with the use of land for farms,houses and factories, it is of uttmost neccessity to use the land for prevention of animal extinction, if we would saave ourselves and our dear planet.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cosystem. A good example is the food web a chain of feeding which links various a...
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Line 5, column 526, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'man'.
Suggestion: Man
... In fact, this could eventually lead to Mans extintion, as humans also rely on the a...
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Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , houses
...s animals with the use of land for farms,houses and factories, it is of uttmost neccess...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, so, therefore, for example, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2367.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91078838174 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65290075955 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489626556017 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6190283465 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.590909091 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04545454545 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372722382913 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112677077514 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133986853257 0.0737576698707 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249262341537 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989220164202 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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