I definitely agree that life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when my grandparents were children. The world has evolved greatly over time since my parents were children, let alone my grandparents. That would be two generations backward. These evolutions have occurred in the areas of housing, basic amenities, transportation, technology, etc to mention but a few. To buttress my point, I will go ahead and give a few scenarios.
First of all, while my late grandparents were still alive, on a few occasions, I had the opportunity to visit the village in Africa where they lived. My grandparents lived in a mud house with a thatched roof. Whenever there was a strong wind or a heavy downpour, the roof had to be reinforced. Also, there were no beds and my grandparents as well as my parents, my siblings and I had to sleep on raffia mats. Those raffia mats usually were the cause of the back pain suffered by my grandparents in the later parts of their lives. Today, I live in a well-erected building, built with bricks and wood. I also sleep in a very comfortable bed with a bed frame and a mattress with plush pillows.
In the area of basic amenities, the necessities of life such as water, electricity, and healthcare were not readily available in the days of my grandparents. Water for drinking, cooking, bathing, as well as for other domestic purposes were all gotten from one source which was the river and this exposed them to various water-borne diseases. Regarding electricity, it was unstable and the use of kerosene lamps was rampant. the healthcare system was also poorly developed as they relied solely on traditional medicine and herbs got from bushes within the village. On one occasion, I developed hemorrhoids and my grandfather went and got some herbs to make a concoction which I drank, but brought me only a temporary relief. Today, I have pipe-borne water, which flows into my home, the electricity is constant, and the healthcare system is topnotch when compared to the days of my grandparents.
In conclusion, I would like to shed more light on how transportation and technology have evolved from the days of my grandparents to date.there were very few cars back in the days of my grandparents. The most common means of transportation was the bicycle on land, or by canoe on the water. We had to walk long distances in our day to day commute back in the day. Movement from one city to another was difficult and would take long hours or days as the transportation system was poorly developed. There were no computers or phones. Today, transportation coupled with technology has evolved. There are more advanced cars, vans, trucks, planes, as well as state of the art ships to mention but a few to make transportation easier, faster and more comfortable. Communication is now easier and more comfortable with the emergence of mobile phones, computers, and the internet which has made the world a global village. Life today is undoubtedly much more easier and comfortable than in the days of my grandparents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...c amenities, transportation, technology, etc to mention but a few. To buttress my...
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Message: Use simply 'occasionally'
Suggestion: occasionally
... my late grandparents were still alive, on a few occasions, I had the opportunity to visit the vil...
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Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were usually
...sleep on raffia mats. Those raffia mats usually were the cause of the back pain suffered by ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... the use of kerosene lamps was rampant. the healthcare system was also poorly devel...
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Line 7, column 655, Rule ID: STATE_OF_THE_ART[1]
Message: Did you mean 'state-of-the-art'?
Suggestion: state-of-the-art
... cars, vans, trucks, planes, as well as state of the art ships to mention but a few to make tran...
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Line 7, column 947, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...village. Life today is undoubtedly much more easier and comfortable than in the days of my ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, still, well, while, as for, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84865900383 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00610362982 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494252873563 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7801212511 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7407407407 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18518518519 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287919063103 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882780695344 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143168131865 0.0737576698707 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189680287401 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843826299784 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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