Agree or disagree. Successful people try new things and take a risk rather than only doing what they already know how to do well?
Success is the dream that everyone want to achieve. People use different ways to achieve success. Some people focus on the stuff they know to get a better understanding, others prefer to take the risk and try new things. In my point of view, I prefer to take a risk and try new thing in order to be successful. The basis for my views is because trying different than the one I already know open my mind for different perspective, help me create new ideas and makes me discover different abilities.
There is no doubt that the only way to learn is by try new things. People get they experience by participate in activieties that they are not familiar with. Even thought the new experience may sound hard and frustrating, trying can help people gain lots of experience. For instance, My english teachers gain the experience on how to use Technology like computer programs to correct our essays from his visit to The United States of America. Because his voyage to the States, he notes that teachers yous their computer to assessment their students' essays. Hence, becuae he have been expose to such Technology, he decided to used it in our class. Thanks to him he was able to detect our weakness more easly and fix it.
In addition to experience, creating new ideas is another factor that erge me to things that I'm not familiar with. Since we are a toddlers humanbeigns always ahve the challanges to discover the surroundings. For example, because they wanted to servive, ancient people learned not only how to hunt, but also how to build shelter and preserve their foods. provided that they needed food and cover, one by one they learned to build houses and manufacture hunting tools to hunt.
As a conclusion, Even though doing the only thing you now have it advantages is some situations, trying new things is the only way that can help people gain more experience. It also the way that extremely essential for people to survival.
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Essay evaluation report II
everyone want to achieve
everyone wants to achieve
The basis for my views is because trying different than the one I already know open my mind for different perspective, help me create
The basis for my views is that because trying different than the one I already know open my mind for different perspective, help me create
is another factor that erge me
is another factor that urges me
Sentence: There is no doubt that the only way to learn is by try new things.
Description: The word by is not usually used as an adverb
Suggestion: by trying new things.
Sentence: People get they experience by participate in activieties that they are not familiar with.
Description: The word by is not usually used as an adverb
Suggestion: by participating
Sentence: Because his voyage to the States, he notes that teachers yous their computer to assessment their students' essays.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by a determiner, possessive
Suggestion: Refer to assessment and their
Sentence: Hence, becuae he have been expose to such Technology, he decided to used it in our class.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and used
Sentence: Since we are a toddlers humanbeigns always ahve the challanges to discover the surroundings.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to toddlers and humanbeigns
Sentence: People get they experience by participate in activieties that they are not familiar with.
Error: activieties Suggestion: activities
Sentence: Hence, becuae he have been expose to such Technology, he decided to used it in our class.
Error: becuae Suggestion: become
Sentence: Thanks to him he was able to detect our weakness more easly and fix it.
Error: easly Suggestion: easily
Sentence: In addition to experience, creating new ideas is another factor that erge me to things that I'm not familiar with.
Error: erge Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Since we are a toddlers humanbeigns always ahve the challanges to discover the surroundings.
Error: humanbeigns Suggestion: human signs
Error: challanges Suggestion: challenges
Error: ahve Suggestion: have
Sentence: For example, because they wanted to servive, ancient people learned not only how to hunt, but also how to build shelter and preserve their foods. provided that they needed food and cover, one by one they learned to build houses and manufacture hunting tools to hunt.
Error: servive Suggestion: survive
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1557 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.579 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.462 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.524 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.17 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 363, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...or my views is because trying different than the one I already know open my mind for...
^^^^
Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...their students essays. Hence, becuae he have been expose to such Technology, he deci...
^^^^
Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...ther factor that erge me to things that Im not familiar with. Since we are a toddl...
^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...me to things that Im not familiar with. Since we are a toddlers humanbeigns always ah...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a toddler' or simply 'toddlers'?
Suggestion: a toddler; toddlers
...that Im not familiar with. Since we are a toddlers humanbeigns always ahve the challanges ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...servive, ancient people learned not only how to hunt, but also how to build shelt...
^^
Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Provided
...build shelter and preserve their foods. provided that they needed food and cover, one by...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lso the way that extremely essential for people to survival.
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'no doubt']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228494623656 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.198924731183 0.158761421928 125% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0752688172043 0.0866891130778 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0376344086022 0.046263068375 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0887096774194 0.0685040099705 129% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0913978494624 0.118717715034 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0241935483871 0.0351676179071 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.58247751961 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0672043010753 0.0309702414327 217% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0618279569892 0.0887237588012 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00806451612903 0.0209618222197 38% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0188172043011 0.0139019557991 135% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1941.0 2387.08602151 81% => OK
No of words: 339.0 408.028673835 83% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72566371681 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.318584070796 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.215339233038 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.156342182891 0.174417080927 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0914454277286 0.112833075102 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58247751961 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530973451327 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 56.4805564211 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.8333333333 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4433760543 48.84282405 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.833333333 120.699889404 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.644075263715 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 40.3672566372 45.7405998639 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.05785123967 1.45489161554 73% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281041279882 0.300154397459 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.144421748103 0.103427244359 140% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.100516494341 0.0752933317313 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.503306057224 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142300127796 0.151897553556 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108212929148 0.114077575197 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068476500678 0.0781384742642 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.351978189589 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.103415727397 0.067059652881 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192648337846 0.210909579961 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549979428005 0.0618886996521 89% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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