are the young people enjoy more than the old people do?
“enjoyment is a convoluted concept which cannot be defined easily” Tara Westover, Educated 2018. Which is the main characteristic of enjoyment? By and large, although thinking that old people enjoy more than the youth, some people disagree. As far as I am concerned, I think young people enjoy more than older individuals do because the youth are powerful, take more risks, and are healthy than the older people. In the following, I am inclined to put forth some arguments to elucidate my schemes.
First and foremost, it is the principle that youth have greater power in the physical and mental abilities than older individuals. For example, many enjoying activities such as exercising, mountain climbing, jogging, and hiking need a powerful physical condition which often the older people have not. Thus, regarding to doing attractive activities, it seems fair to suggest that the young people enjoy more than the older ones.
Another thing coming to the mind is that often youth, in comparison with the older people, have a great sense to take risks. For instance, in bungee jumping, youth seem are acceptable to take the risk and as a result, they experience more enjoyments. On the other hand, the older people are cautious and despite the great enjoyments, would not like to experience risky situations. Thus, it can be implied that the youth enjoy more than older people, especially in risky enjoying situations.
Last but not least, it has been demonstrated that, in the senescence, people are more potential to be affected by age-associated diseases. As an illustrated case, it has been proven that diabetes and other age-related diseases restrict people’s mental and physical activities or even their life-spans. In fact, the age-related diseases could halter the people’s enjoyment. On the contrary, young persons are healthier than older ones; consequentially, they can experience more enjoyments.
To wrap things up, even though many people accede that the old people enjoy more than young ones, I think young people’s enjoyments are greater than the older people. Indeed, young people are powerful than older individuals, take more risks in their lives, and are healthier than older people. If the old people had obtained some youth’s characteristics, they would have enjoyed greatly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 430, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... people enjoy more than the older ones. Another thing coming to the mind is that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, thus, another thing, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, as a result, by and large, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35054347826 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94321328322 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497282608696 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0011331964 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.631578947 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3684210526 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78947368421 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.53846339005 0.236089414692 228% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191276010092 0.076458572812 250% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174555193257 0.0737576698707 237% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.349559120094 0.150856017488 232% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.156366736473 0.0645574589148 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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