Communal encyclopedias vs. online encyclopedias
The lecture and the passage discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of communal online encyclopedias. Although the passage claims that this online encyclopedias is not a good idea, the speaker refutes this idea through a number of reasons which will be described in this report.
First of all, the passage point out that these online encyclopedias frequently do not have academic accepetness, since the texts that they included have been written by other people and there might be inaccurate. The speaker, in contrast, rejects this by claiming that printed encyclopedias can have errors and due to the printing these errors cannot be removed. However, internet encyclopedias errors can be accurate.
Furthermore, unlike the passage which states that the internet provide bed for hackers to pollut the encyclopedia informations, the professor argues that due to the reason which computer especialist can put the articles in read only format. Therefore the crucial fact will be remain reliable. In addition especial editors can check the online encyclopedias to detect the dangerous malwares.
Finally, although the passage says that the online encyclopedias’ focus are on to the popular topics and they can distract people from important issues, the professor disagrees by mentioning that the printed encyclopedias have limited space and they cannot explaintopics throughoutly. Moreover, the topics in these encyclopedias have been judgmenting by group of academic professor to decide which issue is more significant to demonstrated on. Unlike the printed encyclopedias, the online ones have diverse topics and their diversities bring them a strong advantage.
- TPO 23- In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct 75
- TPO28 -Peary’s claim 80
- TPO28-Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past 73
- TPO 24-One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job 76
- Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays not mine 68
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...n put the articles in read only format. Therefore the crucial fact will be remain reliabl...
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Line 5, column 297, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...rucial fact will be remain reliable. In addition especial editors can check the online e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, in addition, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 252.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6746031746 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14303751286 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551587301587 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.4680764427 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1818181818 5.45110844103 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310410007147 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127085372527 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065903942733 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195006765645 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134031749542 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 58.1214874552 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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