Few may doubt the importance of higher education and its impact in other aspects of life, especially on career choosing. Every year, numerous students flood to universities to gain required and sought-after skills of the increasingly competitive job market. Some of them become technicians and some pursue their studies to the zenith of their major and become competent doctors or engineers. It is a matter of debate on which approach is better: graduating from university as soon as possible and join the career, or gain a higher degree and spend more time on studying to have more and better job opportunities? Personally, I recommend my friend the second method and I believe it is a more beneficial idea. I state my reasons on this idea in the following paragraphs.
First of all, I think in first glance it might seem that it is better to end our education as soon as possible and seek a career to earn money, since having no income may put one under the financial pressure to some extent. Relying on parents’ money is difficult. Having said that, if one study in a sophisticated major, the amount of money that one earns is more in the long term. Besides, in the today's competitive job market, employers look for highly skilled and knowledgeable work forces to solve hard problems. Having a mediocre degree, one does not an advantage over other applicants in a career position. I give an example to shed light on this idea: Consider a person who decides to study accounting in order to graduate soon and one who studies software engineering: The positions for a software engineer are much higher-paying than the one who has studied accounting, although it has taken longer to get one's degree.
Alongside the reason I mentioned above, in case of educating longer in university, undoubtedly, my friend has more employment opportunities that brings the advantage for him to encounter a more suitable job, and even if he or she does not like the job, because of the abundance of other positions and his/her knowledge and insights in that major, my friend can switch his/her position later. Yet if he/she chooses to finish his/her study sooner, he/she won't have this great opportunity to change his/her job on demand, since open positions are eminently competitive. For instance, I majored in software engineering which is a difficult field. When I graduated, a lot of companies needed software engineers. The first company that I worked was not very satisfying in my opinion, so after a few months I quitted my job and joined another company with higher salary and better condition.
To recapitulate the aforementioned reasons, I believe that it is better to study longer in the university to have more employment opportunities. First, after graduating, one has more opportunities which pay him/her a great salary and has more options to choose from. Also, if the job one is doing is not rewarding or beneficial, one can easily quit and seek a better job, because of the unique skills one has gained during the long studies in the university.
- TPO 40: Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statment? Should governments spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics? 81
- TPO 41-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Teacher were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Disagree or agree ：It is impossible to be completely honest with your friend. 70
- To complete his or her studies and get a job faster.To study in a major that requires many years of studying but one which would leads to better employment opportunities 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 921, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ng, although it has taken longer to get ones degree. Alongside the reason I menti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, look, may, so, for instance, i think, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90956072351 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86823800537 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542635658915 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.994321749 48.9658058833 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.714285714 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6428571429 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318884475516 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100564238174 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745059525162 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228935836084 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316156345151 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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