A D The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone

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A/D? The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone.

Submitted by omidhldn on Mon, 03/07/2016 - 12:17

Nowadays it's becoming more and more important for individuals to manage the amount of stress in their daily life, in order to unwind themselves. Some people believe spending time alone is the the best way to calm their nerves; however, other propose other ways. It seems to me that, cutting off from civilization is not a good idea to get rid of stressful life; in fact, there are some alternatives like music and time management to reach this goal. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in this essay.

To begin with, one of the best ways to calm your nerves is listening to music. Indeed, one of the reasons that make anxiety get worse is thinking about it for a long period of time , so listening to a new-age music would prevent us from ruminating (reminding negative thoughts over and over). For example, mostly before exam, I put my ear-bod and play a mellow album. I usually play one of Schiller's album; in fact, I'm a hard-core Schiller fan. Since most of the tests take more than 3 hours, I have to find a way that helps me become tranquil and also diminish negative thoughts . In other words, a few moments before the exam I always ask myself "What would happen if I failed the exam or got bad mark" or "If I had studied harder, I would have had better self-steam". Whenever I turn on my MP3-player, all of the negative notions are vanished. As this example clarifies, music prevent harmful ideas to bubble up in our mind and also it helps us feel relax and peaceful.

Moreover, managing our daily activities in order of important will help us to get rid of stresses. This means that, in order to calm our nerves we shouldn't go to an island and seek for loneliness; in fact, we should have peaceful life in the midst of our daily activities. Performing too many jobs at the same time will reduce our efficiency and also causes stress; nevertheless, we will be more successful if we prioritize our duties and complete the most important one at first. As the new method explains by organizing our daily activities; besides, completing our jobs one by one, we have the reward of pleasing ourselves without a guilty conscience.

To put in a nutshell, if want to have less stressful life, we should try different ways like Yoga and exercise; instead of, escaping from civilization and seeking for loneliness, otherwise we would soon experience island fever.

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Sentence: Some people believe spending time alone is the the best way to calm their nerves; however, other propose other ways.
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managing our daily activities in order of important will help us
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if want to have less stressful life,
if we want to have less stressful life,

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prioritizing our daily activities in order of important will help us to get rid of stresses

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Do you have any suggestion to solve this problem?

Well, you may do more reading for academic articles and learn advanced essay writing. For exam purpose, you should put less content for examples, change the sentence styles and have more practice.

You may try this pattern:

Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree. (suppose we support side A)

Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).

Para 3: Second, reason 2, blabla... do the same thing as First

Para 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. first,....second...However, there is no causation/relation... Still I support side A, ....

Para 5: Conclusion.

An simple example (Eating at home or restaurant) for paragraph 2:
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence: Eating at home can save money) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences: I can prepare cheaper food from food market; I don't need to drive or take a bus to reach the restaurant; I don't need to pay tips...) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentence: for example, a sandwich can cost me $10 at restaurant, but it only cost me $5 at home.) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences: with the money I saved, I can buy a good book to read; I can use the money for a trip...).