Do you agree that it is better to work for business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one’s own family.
Nowadays, an increasing number of people care about the better choice of who you want to work for, so the question of whether work for business owned by someone else or work for the business of there own family has attracted much attention. In my opinion, working for business owned by someone else is the better choice.
First and foremost, work for other people business is more challengeable then work in family’s own business. Because if you work in your family’s own business, someone will care about your identity so that you can not experience the truth of working environment. However, if you work for someone else business, you must pay your real effort to get your achievement. Take my 20 years old brother John for an example, he works for our family’s business “Flying Locker” for 5 years since he graduated. \\\times up/// Two years ago, he told me that he always felt working is unchallengeable. He really not pays much efforts on his work, but his superiors were always praise he, so he felt he was very hating this phenomenon. Hence, he changed a company and worked well without his identity. Now he tells me that he needs to get achievement by his own ability and without his identity, “It’s really more challengeable for me now!”, he said. Indeed, working for someone else business is really more challengeable.
Second, work for someone else business will build up people’s own network of contacts. If people work in their family’s own company, they will always face to their family’s member and stay in a constant social network. While if people work in others company, they can improve their interpersonal skills and even find more friends who have common interest with them. Of course, when they build up their own social network, they will absolutely broaden their horizons from their supporting network and friends. Therefore, people’s work in someone else business is surely better than work in their family’s own business.
Admittedly, people may have higher salaries when they work for their family’s company. But these salaries are not real show of people’s own efforts. Because, it includes people’s identity and many their factors unrelated to personal effort. So that high fake wages will let people have false sense of their self, their ability.
From what I have been discuss above, I think people work in someone else business is better than work in their family’s own business.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
... choice of who you want to work for, so the question of whether work for business owned by someone else...
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Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: THERE_OWN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
...omeone else or work for the business of there own family has attracted much attention. In...
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Line 3, column 74, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...r people business is more challengeable then work in family’s own business. Because ...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...years since he graduated. \\\times up/// Two years ago, he told me that he always...
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Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... is unchallengeable. He really not pays much efforts on his work, but his superiors ...
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Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'praised'.
Suggestion: praised
...his work, but his superiors were always praise he, so he felt he was very hating this ...
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Line 3, column 690, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...rs were always praise he, so he felt he was very hating this phenomenon. Hence, he changed a co...
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Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'sensed'.
Suggestion: sensed
...h fake wages will let people have false sense of their self, their ability. From w...
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Line 9, column 23, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'discussed'.
Suggestion: discussed
...their ability. From what I have been discuss above, I think people work in someone e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, i think, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04668304668 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62711131566 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486486486486 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3254335323 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8095238095 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.380952381 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.526812906403 0.236089414692 223% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.222309738358 0.076458572812 291% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.186832826168 0.0737576698707 253% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.370729144782 0.150856017488 246% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181623591362 0.0645574589148 281% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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