It is obvious that human beings are social creatures and communication and making friendships are from the crucial aspects of their life. Views may vary when it comes to the issue that having a small number of friends over a long period of times may contribute to happiness or making many new friends easily. Different people will adopt different issue toward this issue depending on their characters and experiences, and personally I am of the opinion that making friendships which will last for a long period of time is more important and is more beneficial and pleasant for people. I feel this way because of some reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs:
The first and foremost reason which should be mentioned is that, In fact we make friends to support and accompany us in different situations such as happiness, sadness or difficulties, and it is obvious that when people know each other for a long time as they spend long time with each other they are aware of each other’s personality and characters, therefor, for example when ever each of them face a problem they could offer best effective solution to each other based on their personalities and abilities. While people who know each other just for a short time could not do this for each other. For example, in the first year of my marriage, whenever I had a problem with my husband, when I consulted with my old friends, they guided me correctly that how to manage my relationship, because they know my personality and my weakness well and in fact I could trust their suggestion which was really worth full for me.
The other reason which should be noted is that, old friend can be counted as a family member, and they will do whatever they can for each other, because of the deep feeling which is between them. In fact, they feel responsible for their friendships. They do not pay attention to unimportant issues and they don’t judge each other. Whatever they do is just for making each other happy in order to have a better feeling. For instance, when I’m not in a good mood my old friends come to my house and they try to change my mood without asking me a question about the reason of my bad mood. However, I remember that when I was in university, whenever I was not in a good mood, my roommate asked me different questions and she begun to judge me and in fact it was not important to her to try to do something for making me happy.
To draw my conclusion, according to aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that old friends always are more beneficial for people, because as they know each other’s personality, weakness and ability therefor they could consult each other well, and In fact they can be count as your family member who do everything for each other without any judgment and expectation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... when it comes to the issue that having a small number of friends over a long period of times may...
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Line 1, column 505, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... friendships which will last for a long period of time is more important and is more beneficia...
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Line 2, column 323, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ach other they are aware of each other’s personality and characters, therefor, fo...
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Line 2, column 424, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'offer the best'.
Suggestion: offer the best
... each of them face a problem they could offer best effective solution to each other based ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67070707071 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62179573503 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448484848485 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.1344086022 189% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 146.081318037 48.9658058833 298% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 177.846153846 100.406767564 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.0769230769 20.6045352989 185% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197654030295 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086414637826 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601138262553 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137999539854 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733462024237 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.0537634409 171% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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