Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To achieve successful development of a country, a government should spend more money on young children's education rather than on universities'.
Undoubtedly, education is an important tool that is applied in the contemporary world to succeed, as it mitigates the challenges which are faced in the life. This opens doors of opportunities that enables individual to achieve better prospects in all facets of life. With this in mind, there exists a controversial view as to whether the governments should spend their budgets on the adults education or children. As far as I am concerned, children have several advantages in compared to adults that provokes them to pay their major attention to these group of the society, among which, enjoying high capacities and active brains, having much leisure times without any engaging, and possess significant potentials to be a prosperous and effective person for the future of the country are of conspicuous reasons.
To begin with, children enjoys an active brains in comparison to the elderly people as well as they have outstanding capacity in learning new stuffs. One of the greatest privileges of the education is related to the advancement of a country both economically and socially among the other countries, which the talents and mind activities play a vital role in realizing this settings. Accordingly, recent medical statistics prove the fact that children are subject to learning versatile educational materials and the governmental education planners can impose their interests and requires conveniently to these spectrum than adult people.
Although it may assert that allocating a significant educational budget on adults can fortify the soul of education and literacy level, it can adversely affect the future schedules on the research and education contents. Obviously, adults have important engaging in their life such as working in the offices and the companies in order to afford their families, making crucial decisions on their children's future, and allot a few time on the leisure times, to name but a few. Consequently, they cannot spend their time on the educational issues better than children can. In contrast, young adults have great deal of time in spending it on different innovations, discoveries and planning for their educational future. Therefore, encouraging children to the educational environments can lead a society toward the brilliant and astonishing educational future.
Last but not least, without any shadow of doubt, children are the paramount human resources of any society as far as the development and progress of each country depends on their innovations and willpower in the near future. In this regard, developed countries have reached to the fact that investing a great deal of plans and budget on children in educational centers, not only leads children to the active persons in diverse activation in the society, but also constructs more initiative and useful individuals for the future modification in the community. In contrast, elderly people have no required willpower to be helpful and effective for their community anymore. Thus, the governments through dedicating enough money on children's education can kill two birds with one stone: exploiting young adults in fulfilling the needs of the society in the future, and upbringing useful children for the community.
To sum up, any country in order to reach real development in contemporary world should accept the fact that achieving prosperous and development depends on different factors and they have to exploit all of them in proper way through putting especial attention. As it was mentioned in the passage, education one of the important sections which needs to precise and specific schedules because it plays important role in constructing an ideal society.
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Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: adults'; adult's
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Suggestion: these
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Suggestion: this spectrum; these spectra; these spectrums
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'consequently', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'as to', 'in contrast', 'such as', 'as well as', 'to begin with', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251993620415 0.229887763892 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.124401913876 0.158761421928 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.113237639553 0.0866891130778 131% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0382775119617 0.046263068375 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0350877192982 0.0685040099705 51% => OK
Prepositions: 0.13716108453 0.118717715034 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0398724082935 0.0351676179071 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.95300586785 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0350877192982 0.0309702414327 113% => OK
Particles: 0.00159489633174 0.00188951952338 84% => OK
Determiners: 0.108452950558 0.0887237588012 122% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0159489633174 0.0209618222197 76% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0111642743222 0.0139019557991 80% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3679.0 2387.08602151 154% => OK
No of words: 577.0 408.028673835 141% => OK
Chars per words: 6.37608318891 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.426343154246 0.338922669872 126% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.344887348354 0.251872472559 137% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.258232235702 0.174417080927 148% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.190641247834 0.112833075102 169% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95300586785 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490467937608 0.524397521467 94% => OK
Word variations: 59.8638483538 59.2087087015 101% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0555555556 20.5533526081 156% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.5256897494 48.84282405 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 204.388888889 120.699889404 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0555555556 20.5533526081 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.644075263715 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 66.5442903909 45.7405998639 145% => OK
Elegance: 2.16935483871 1.45489161554 149% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246300539171 0.300154397459 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123942966734 0.103427244359 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0412680322638 0.0752933317313 55% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.610820725095 0.497263757937 123% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13075571723 0.151897553556 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120068755729 0.114077575197 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049656926351 0.0781384742642 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.514602169597 0.336927656856 153% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0696365012136 0.067059652881 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182309330407 0.210909579961 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172677042023 0.0618886996521 28% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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