Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To achieve successful development of a country, a government should spend more money on young children’s education rather than on universities
Throughout history, education has played a crucial role in societies. The desire for being educated lies deep within the human spirit. In actuality, it has long been believed that the quality and effectiveness of education have no correlation with the age at which students receive them. However, this issue has recently engendered many controversies among academicians. While some are adamantly claiming that young children’s education should be given more prominence, many may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that governments should focus their attention on enhancing the quality of education in universities. Nevertheless, many remain neutral, sharing the view that a myriad of factors should be taken into consideration so as to be able to prove which belief is closer to reality. From my own perspective, young children’s education has a more profound impact on the economic growth of a country. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my viewpoint through three outstanding reasons.
First and foremost, without a shadow of a doubt, children learn faster and more effectively than adults. This means that in order to teach a certain amount of material to a child, less energy and time is required compared to that for an adult. Furthermore, children learn the material more profoundly, especially at early age. For the purpose of illustration, the Japan government conducted a pilot research project years ago to investigate the connection between age and learning efficiency. They found that a student between the age of 4 to 6 learns two times faster than a student over the age of 14.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that a person’s personality forms at an early age. They develop the most important skills such as the ability to establish a relationship with others, the ability to work as a team player, etc. under the age of 10. Therefore, it is axiomatic that the quality of education they receive during this time will shape their future. According to recent research conducted by a social group in my country, students who have received high-quality education under the age of 10 are more likely to succeed in the future. This study indicated such students develop more essential skills and will be more successful leaders in the future.
The last but not the least reason by which the claim is justified is that there are many skills which one over the age of 18 cannot learn. As a case in point, the ability to learn to speak a foreign language like a native is inextricably intertwined with the age of the learner. In other words, the more one grows older, the less likely one will become to develop such skills. This issue has been the serious bone of contention over the past decades. However, the general consensus is that when one surpasses the age of 18, one becomes unable to learn to speak a foreign language like natives. Scientists say it is probably due to the fact that once one passes the age of 18, a certain part of one’s brain becomes significantly less active than before.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one can draw the conclusion that the government should place more value on the education of students at an early age. Nonetheless, it should be stressed that this argument is not to play down the indispensable role universities play in society. Finally, it is worth bearing in mind that this is a controversial issue that needs to be further studied so as to provide conclusive results unanimously accepted by all academicians. Therefore, I suggest that more surveys and studies be conducted to enable us to answer this question more precisely.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
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Message: "required compared" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'comparing' or 'to be compared'.
Suggestion: comparing; to be compared
...child, less energy and time is required compared to that for an adult. Furthermore, chil...
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Suggestion: cans
...any skills which one over the age of 18 cannot learn. As a case in point, the ability ...
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Suggestion: to speak
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, therefore, while, as to, in brief, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3048.0 1977.66487455 154% => OK
No of words: 599.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08848080134 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94716853372 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94002923384 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 303.0 212.727598566 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505843071786 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 970.2 618.680645161 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5356023573 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.103448276 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6551724138 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86206896552 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196562213236 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507024317264 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521453414464 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10679099409 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527563930622 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 86.8835125448 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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