Today, by spreading societies and populations, working or traveling are important factors as studying to have better life. Some believe that, teenagers have to go to university immediately after high school. However, I think that, students need to achieve some experience before university by going on trips or having careers. I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs due to this statement.
My first reason to illustrate my idea is that, students have to know their upcoming issues in the future and get some experience to face them in the right way. Before university they have to see real world to change their opinion about life. In their age, the characteristic of people is shaped and we can put it in an appropriate way by forcing the teenagers to discovery the challenges of the life. This would not be achieved by traveling or working. For example, when I was 18 my father sent me to travel with my cousin to another country for 6 month. My cousin and I started camping in various locations with some people that their language was different from us. After that trip I learned how to live alone in another country. Therefore, I did not have any problem to live in dormitories for 4 years at university in Spain that I couldn’t talk to them a lot.
Second of all, I believe that, people can know their abilities and characters at work or trips. Students can go to some part time job for one year before university to decide better which filed is appropriate for them to continue at university. Moreover, they can continue their job while they study to learn more and more. For instance, one year before starting my university I decided to work for my uncle’s chemistry laboratory to know this field better. After some month I felt that I really love this filed and I choose chemistry at university as my filed. Besides, I continued my job in that lab. During my study I saw my improvement in my grades just because I could use my learning at university in my job.
To sum up, through the up warding reasons I think that all students need to know their abilities and issues after school to have a better life, and it would not be achieved by having some experience in working and travelling before university.
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- In any situation progress requires discussion among people who have contrasting points of view Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In devel 50
- In any profession business politics education government those in power should step down after five years 66
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement After high school students should have at least oneyear to work or travel It s better than attendinguniversity straight away 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...perience to face them in the right way. Before university they have to see real world ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...c of people is shaped and we can put it in an appropriate way by forcing the teenagers to discovery t...
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Line 2, column 548, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...with my cousin to another country for 6 month. My cousin and I started camping in var...
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t their language was different from us. After that trip I learned how to live alone i...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... work or trips. Students can go to some part time job for one year before university to d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67341772152 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67481743182 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493670886076 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6323593371 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159826161238 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057190769835 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046090267837 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132478561777 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551188855022 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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