some people suggest that affording children over fifteen the right to vote would lead to a better society. After all, the more voices are heard in a democracy, the more legitimacy elected leaders have. Be that as it may, I believe that society would actually be worse off if fifteen-year-olds were allowed to vote. Teenagers are too immature to vote, and often simply copy the preferences of their parents.
Fifteen, is simply put, not very old. Children at that age lack the emotional maturity needed to make intelligent decisions when voting. They often feel passionately about a topic one day only to have their interest fizzle out the next; clearly, that causes problems when the decisions made affect people throughout society. Fifteen-year-olds also lack the sophistication needed to distinguish between truly valuable causes and those that are merely exciting. Politicians would simply speak to the emotions of the younger voters during speeches, and teenagers might vote for frivolous policies, such as longer school vacations. But voting should not be taken so lightly—no choice, arguably, could be of more importance.
I also believe it would be a mistake to allow fifteen-year-olds to vote because they are likely to simply copy the preferences of their parents. For example, during elections, voters are often influenced by economic factors, such as promises to provide tax breaks, the expansion of social aid programs. But fifteen-year-olds are not economically independent. Their financial situations depend on those of their parents. For this reason, their parents would influence them to vote to most help the family financially, which is not honest democracy. To make matters worse, politicians would realize that families usually vote in the same way, and start emphasizing policies helping families at the expense of other interest groups in order to get their votes. For example, politicians might promise to raise money for schools by taxing businesses. This would effectively give parents a disproportionately large influence.
There is a good reason that virtually no country on the planet allows people who are so young to vote. They have yet to mature into responsible tax-paying citizens. Their interests are fickle, and not aligned with what is best for society as a whole. It would be a mistake to give them influence in the democratic process.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
some people suggest that affording children ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, so, after all, for example, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30687830688 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00237394758 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568783068783 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3900243705 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1818181818 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1818181818 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140077840395 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416948920656 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503707230214 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986104686269 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368182041754 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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